吳銓高詩 [移民]

[吳銓高]

移民
聞君赴遠遊 , 竟日漫離愁
忍淚相握別 , 歡談互拒憂
移加非避世 , 出國有圖謀
萬里鵬程志 , 精英爭傚尤

[芬陀利]

忍淚相握別 , 歡談互拒憂

頷聯首句若拗成“仄仄平仄仄”，下聯最好以“可平平仄平”救之為宜。
另
“圖謀”一般用意不是很正面
布局上似可再斟酌
小頑童多言，請莫見怪！

[吳銓高]

移民【原創 : 吳銓高】人26古韻
聞君徙美洲 , 竟日漫離愁。忍淚相握別 ; 攀談問始由。
逃秦尋藉口 ; 出國欲何求。萬里鯤鵬赴 , 功成志可酬。

Migration【By Charles Wu】
You were now migrating to America by airway.
Such surprising message made me sad all the day.
We shook hands and said good-bye without tear.
The reason why you left was what I wanted to hear.
That you evaded Communist ruling was an excuse.
You should have better convincing points and views.
I sincerely hoped that your targets could be fulfilled.
You started the long journey and your new life to rebuild.

吳銓高 詩情畫意 [移民]------------ [卷B] 451


輝字吳銓高詩 [移民]------------ [卷F] 002


吳銓高 毛筆書法1 [移民]--------------- [卷05] 060


吳銓高 毛筆書法2 [移民]--------------- [卷24] 964


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