吳銓高詩 [獵鷹]

[吳銓高]

獵鷹
巖上隼鷹人入侵 , 精心訓練獵場臨
無端折翼遭拋棄 , 囚禁樊籠待毒針

吳銓高 毛筆書法2 [獵鷹]---------------- [卷28] 613

[卞思]

首句不太順暢,第二句的韻腳也不穩,依詞長所欲表達之主題,應有甚深感慨才對,全詩轉折上似需再做調整,方顯餘味。
妄評勿怪！

[吳銓高]

獵鷹【原創 : 吳銓高】物27古韻
巖上雄鷹當獵禽 , 精馴迅猛值千金。無端折翼遭拋棄 , 慨嘆主人何負心。

Falcon【By Charles Wu】
The baby hawk born on the cliff becomes a hunting tool.
It worths thousand dollars as it is tame, rapid and cool.
Breaking its wing accidentally, it is abandoned.
“ Why treat your pet so cruelly ?” its master is questioned.

吳銓高 詩情畫意 [獵鷹]2------------ [卷I] 214


吳銓高 詩情畫意 [獵鷹]1------------ [卷B] 532


輝字吳銓高詩 [獵鷹]------------ [卷D] 776


吳銓高 毛筆書法1 [獵鷹]---------------- [卷10] 724


吳銓高 毛筆書法2 [獵鷹]---------------- [卷28] 613


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